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Posted 28 July 2010 - 05:44 PM

So, I'm at about 2500 words, and I expect to get to about 10,000. I'm trying to finish it before going back to school in late August. My girlfriend is going to edit it for me, and if I like it I guess I'll try to get it published. Anyways, it's about a guy who wakes up from cryogenic storage in a spaceship that's full of nasty creatures with no memory of what's going on...

Hey wait, it gets better, I promise!

Anyways, does anybody whose a little more experienced in the writing department have any suggestions? Also, when it's done I can send it to you guys individually over email or pms or whatever, I just don't want to post it directly to these boards, since if it gets published that would piss them off.
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Posted 29 July 2010 - 04:19 PM

Wait a minute ... so it's the nasty creatures who have no memory of what's going on?
"I had a lot of different ideas. At one point, Luke, Leia and Ben were all going to be little people, and we did screen tests to see if we could do that." -George Lucas, in STAR WARS: the Annotated Screenplays (p197).
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Posted 30 July 2010 - 03:16 AM

Make them wear top hats.

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Posted 02 August 2010 - 03:50 PM

Sounds like a PS1 game. Make the guy who lost his memory be the person who made them or some ironic shit.

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Posted 04 August 2010 - 10:41 PM

No Civ, it's the guy who awakes who has no memory. Also, I've finished a short story, about 1000 words or so, and my girlfriend's editing it right now. Once it's done, I suppose I'll post it.

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Posted 29 November 2010 - 01:14 PM

I'd like to read it too, if you don't mind
Apparently writing about JM here is his secret weakness. Muwahaha!!!! Now I have leverage over him and am another step closer towards my goal of world domination.

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Kurgan X showed me this web comic done with Legos. It pokes fun at all six Star Wars films and I found it to be extremely entertaining.
<a href="http://www.irregularwebcomic.net/cast/starwars.html" target="_blank">http://www.irregularwebcomic.net/cast/starwars.html</a>
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Posted 11 April 2011 - 01:20 AM

Same here.

The thing is, I find it hard to join the book-club on here. I dont want to vote and then be obligated to read a book I dont feel like reading. Plus you have to get a copy and all first etc.

The short story club should have two rules:
-First one to post a short story at the beginning of the month -> thats the story no consecutive months, if it gets popular well find a better way
-Short story has to be accessible online
Maximum length?

Something like that?
I suppose one of us posts a short story for october, and the three of us can get cracking on it Jez, skye, me
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Posted 30 April 2011 - 04:25 PM

I've already got a short story up that *sniffle* *sniffle* I don't think anyone has read yet. It's called the Price we Pay. It's in here and not that far down on the topic list.
Apparently writing about JM here is his secret weakness. Muwahaha!!!! Now I have leverage over him and am another step closer towards my goal of world domination.

"And the Evil that was vanquished shall rise anew. Wrapped in the guise of man shall he walk amongst the innocent and Terror shall consume they that dwell upon the Earth. The skies will rain fire. The seas shall become as blood. The righteous shall fall before the wicked! And all creation shall tremble before the burning standards of Hell!" - Mephisto

Kurgan X showed me this web comic done with Legos. It pokes fun at all six Star Wars films and I found it to be extremely entertaining.
<a href="http://www.irregularwebcomic.net/cast/starwars.html" target="_blank">http://www.irregularwebcomic.net/cast/starwars.html</a>
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