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#1 User is offline   Marky Icon

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Posted 03 October 2005 - 07:52 AM

Some poem I wrote this weekend...

walking on the beach
the sand bruising my feet
till they bleed bleed bleed
the smell of blood makes me high
still I cannot reach
the starless sky

flying on a cloud
the winds kissing my hold
turning cold cold cold
higher than the sky I ride
the thunder as loud
as a goodbye

throwing rocks and stones
at people tall and small
till they fall fall fall
the sound of crush makes me smile
sight of broken bones
not ceasing my bile
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Posted 07 October 2005 - 08:02 PM

ROCK LOBSTER!
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Posted 10 October 2005 - 02:24 AM

We were at a party, an ear flew into the deep! biggrin.gif happy.gif

In all seriousness, I'm sorry, I'm not quite feeling it, Marky...

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Posted 10 October 2005 - 10:04 AM

QUOTE (Slade @ Oct 10 2005, 02:24 AM)
We were at a party, an ear flew into the deep! biggrin.gif happy.gif

In all seriousness, I'm sorry, I'm not quite feeling it, Marky...


I have to agree, it sounded better when I wrote it happy.gif
All in all, I think the first paragraph is fairly nice, but the second and third suck royal ass.

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Posted 10 October 2005 - 07:53 PM

Is this an open forum for poetry?
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Posted 10 October 2005 - 07:57 PM

I think so.

I was going to put something up, but my teacher hasn't given our poems back to us yet.
Apparently writing about JM here is his secret weakness. Muwahaha!!!! Now I have leverage over him and am another step closer towards my goal of world domination.

"And the Evil that was vanquished shall rise anew. Wrapped in the guise of man shall he walk amongst the innocent and Terror shall consume they that dwell upon the Earth. The skies will rain fire. The seas shall become as blood. The righteous shall fall before the wicked! And all creation shall tremble before the burning standards of Hell!" - Mephisto

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Posted 10 October 2005 - 08:16 PM

Allrighty then!

Woke up at night, walked down the street,
my body's achin' and I can't keep the beat,
Breakfast walks in a sunday cleat,
My body's achin and I can't keep the beat,
American ass glued to its seat,
My body's achin and I can't keep the beat.

Glassy party at the red sea
Seritonin into me

How many times didja wake to find
Your world on backwards and your feet feel fine
How many times didja wake to find
Libido shattered on a trash incline

Fog in your ears when you try to eat
My body's achin' and I can't keep the beat
Apostrophe with your cream of wheat
My body's achin' and I can't keep the beat.
Sweet refrain in a cat to greet,
My body's achin' and I can't keep the beat.

Glassy party at the red sea
Seritonin into me

How many times didja wake to find
Your world on backwards and your feet feel fine
How many times didja wake to find
Libido shattered on a trash incline.

Walk around the block
early not late...
gets dark not lighter
walk around the block
fog's a web...
And I'm the spider
walk around the block...
and I'm the spider

glassy party at the red sea
seritonin into me
seritonin into me
seritonin into me....
And I'm the spider.

This will be a song, I think, working on guitar tabs right now.

EDIT: 300th post!!!

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Posted 15 October 2005 - 12:00 PM

That's one of those one's thats so foggy, it's either utter gibberish or very very deep. tongue.gif

Nah, I get most of it.

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Posted 21 October 2005 - 10:32 AM

im a bit apprehensive about posting my poetry here, or anywhere. i love to share my poetry with people but i like to first be convinced they actually want to hear/read it. so anyway, here it is, read it or not. thing is, im having a really hard time finishing it, i would appreciate any sugestions (preferably serious).

There is a whisper on the wind.
A premonition under my skin.
A rumor among the trees
That sets a quiver in my knees
The crows take-up the call-
A warning to us all.
Beyond the brumal sea of black,
Mr. Winters is coming back.

I can scarce suppress a shiver
When I hear the words of the river.
The writing on the stones
Is like brass in my bones.
When the wolves pick-up the scent
They balefully lament,
Across the crepuscular sky,
Mr. Winters is drawing nigh.

Dolorous deity of tales retold.
Bitter god of dark and cold.
Blazing trails untread before,
Along the crags of Acheron’s shore
Son of Sorrow; ill-begotten,
From ancient ages yet unforgotten.
From tenebrous realms loathed and feared.
Mr. Winters has reappeared.

The world reposes in despair,
As he emerges from his lair.
He dwells within that darkest place
Thinly covered by my face.
Once again his corpse has arisen,
Wretched soul; still unforgiven.
Blah blah blah
Mr. Winters something something


in case its not obvious, the portion im having trouble with is filled in with blah-something. thanx for reading!
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Posted 21 October 2005 - 11:58 AM

I think that "Blah blah blah" line needs to be changed tongue.gif
I'll try to help, but it seems that I would need to do some research first. aka something that I cannot do right now.
Apparently writing about JM here is his secret weakness. Muwahaha!!!! Now I have leverage over him and am another step closer towards my goal of world domination.

"And the Evil that was vanquished shall rise anew. Wrapped in the guise of man shall he walk amongst the innocent and Terror shall consume they that dwell upon the Earth. The skies will rain fire. The seas shall become as blood. The righteous shall fall before the wicked! And all creation shall tremble before the burning standards of Hell!" - Mephisto

Kurgan X showed me this web comic done with Legos. It pokes fun at all six Star Wars films and I found it to be extremely entertaining.
<a href="http://www.irregularwebcomic.net/cast/starwars.html" target="_blank">http://www.irregularwebcomic.net/cast/starwars.html</a>
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Posted 27 October 2005 - 01:42 PM

The world reposes in despair,
As he emerges from his lair.
He dwells within that darkest place
Thinly covered by my face.
Once again his corpse has arisen,
Wretched soul; still unforgiven.
Blah blah blah
Mr. Winters something something

This post has been edited by ElaynaTang: 27 October 2005 - 02:09 PM

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Posted 27 October 2005 - 01:46 PM

Can we put poetry that we wrote, but don't connect with? I wrote some dark poetry when I was angry, but I don't actually connect with it.
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Posted 27 October 2005 - 02:08 PM

The world reposes in despair,
As he emerges from his lair.
He dwells within that darkest place
Thinly covered by my face.
Once again his corpse has arisen,
Wretched soul; still unforgiven.
Blah blah blah
Mr. Winters something something
in case its not obvious, the portion im having trouble with is filled in with blah-something. thanx for reading!

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damn computer, sorry bout that last post... my connection keeps failing...

anyway, was this the poem we were discussing the other day?

guilletiene doesn't work...
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