[whogivsahoot]

Here's my ideas for Episodes I and II.

"Episode I: The Clone Wars Begin"

Anakin is already Obi-Wan's apprentice at this point, with assanation attemps on senate members begin to increase dramaticlly. Obi-Wan investigates, different leads lead to different planets, while Anakin protects and tries to win over Padme, without using some of the worst dialogue written in the history of film. Obi-Wan investigation shows a that a former Jedi, Count Dooku, who was presumed dead, has actually left the Order and become a Sith Lord. As Dooku attempts to rally up allies, Obi-Wan tries to make it back to the council, but not before encountering General Grievous. They have a quick duel, but Grievous clearly has the advantage. Obi-Wan makes a quick escape. Grievous informs Dooku the Republic will be aware of the Separtist's plans in a couple of hours. Dooku claims he must inform his master. He contacts Darth Sidious from offscreen, so the audience is unaware that he is in fact Palpatine. Obi-Wan makes it back to the Council in one piece, and informs them of the impending danger. The Council is shocked, Yoda in particular, due to his inability to sense any of these happenings. When Anakin hears of the Separatists' plans, he immediately tells Padme, right before a legion of battle droids begins their march toward the Senate. Palpatine is surprisingly calm, and goes into his office. Just as the battle droids prepare their attack, mysterious battle ships fly in, carrying soldiers in white armor. The clones have arrived, and desimate the droids. The Council is shocked and confused. Mace Windu asks the leader of the squad who the hell they are and where they came from. The clone is Commander Cody, and states that the Chancellor in fact called for their aid. Cut to the Separtists' who are all shocked and frightened, all except Dooku and Grievous. Grievous is war hungry, and welcomes the challenge, and leaves to prepare his troops. Dooku turns on a hologram of his master, Lord Sidious, who the audience sees is in fact Palpatine, and informs him that the war is going as planned.



Episode II is considerably longer.

"Episode II: Fall from Grace"

The film starts with the Council members Yoda and Mace Windu questioning Palpatine, demanding an explanation. Palpatine says the clone army was merely a precaution, and that he had never really intended to use it. The Council is upset by the fact that they were not informed, but Palpatine turns the argument in his favor, stating that if they Jedi say they have no part in Republic business and politics, then why should they question his political choices. Mace and Yoda see his point, and agree that they should still try to protect the Republic, but they still send Obi-Wan, to Kamino to investigate. Meanwhile, due to the assassination attempts, Anakin tries to place Padme in a less obvious setting, like the streets of Coruscant. While there, they fall in more and more love with each other (No hideous dialogue here either). They go to a nice little diner, where all the sudden, a drunken alien approaches Padme. He recognizes her and threatens her, tells her it’s only a matter of time until she is dead, like some of the other senators who weren’t lucky enough to survive the assassination attempts. Anakin tells him to leave but the drunk alien refuses, and Anakin kills him, right in front of everyone in the diner. Anakin is taken aback at what he has just done, and leaves quickly. Obi-Wan sees everything at Kamino, and fights Jango Fett like in “Attack of the Clones”. Jango escapes, and Obi-Wan is unable to place a tracking device on him. Cut to Count Dooku, who is training his apprentice, Darth Maul. While dueling, Dooku tells Maul of his plans on an attack on Naboo. He believes that the planet can have great affect on the war at large, due to the Gungan warriors (don’t worry, no Jar Jar, and the Gungans won’t be so damn goofy this time). Maul suggests Kashyyk as well, due to the Wookies, who are infamous for their brutality and strength. Dooku agrees, and sends Grievous to Kashyyk, and Maul to Naboo. Anakin, still shaken from the murder he has committed, retreats to the Senate for help, hoping that Padme is there. She isn’t, but Palpatine is. Anakin explains that he can not tell the Jedi, for they will then learn about his crime and his love for Padme and expel him from the Order. Palpatine then begins to see Anakin in a more sinister light, just what he was looking for. He begins his manipulation at once, saying such things as;

Did you become a Jedi to harness the power of the Force, or to merely learn its past and discipline? Etc….

He almost wins Anakin over by stating that he is aware of his love for Padme, and that the Sith allow love and passion. Cut to Anakin talking with Padme. She says she understands why he killed the creature in the bar, but thinks they should retreat to her old home planet, Naboo. They get into her ship and leave. Cut to Obi-Wan, who is with the Council, and tells them about Kamino. The Council agrees that they need to take action, and Yoda volunteers to go to Kashyyk. Cut to Anakin and Padme, who are shocked to see that they are flying over a battlefield on Naboo. They land in a more quiet area, and are again shocked to see Mace Windu is leading the Republic. It appears that the Republic is victorious, and Anakin, Mace, and Padme go to the main palace to inform the Queen. To their shock, she is dead, and a shadowy figure is standing over her body. It is Darth Maul. Anakin and Mace tell Padme to go back to the ship. Some clones escort her. Then Mace and Anakin begin dueling Maul, who holds his own against both of them. In an epic duel, Maul is slain. Anakin is glad they have come on top, but Mace is troubled. He feels the love between Padme and Anakin, and tells Anakin that he must choose between the Order and Padme. Anakin is shocked and angered by this demand, and tells Mace that he will never leave her. Mace states, “Then you will leave the Order.”, and begins to walk towards the exit. Anakin says to himself “And so I shall..” , and backstabs Mace with his lightsaber. Again, he is taken aback at the crime he has committed, but comes up with a plan. He recovers Maul’s lightsaber, and runs back to Padme. He informs her that Mace was killed in duel by Maul. She believes him, and he tells the Council the same. They believe him as well, for he has the Sith’s lightsaber as proof of the duel. He tells Palpatine the truth however, and Palpatine manipulates Anakin even further, stating that through love and passion, he was able to gain enough power to slay a Jedi Master. Anakin agrees, and is desperate to stay with Padme. Cut to Padme and Anakin being married. Cut to Yoda and Obi-Wan landing on Kashyyk. And the final scene of the film, Anakin swearing allegiance to Palpatine, thus becoming
Darth Vader.

Well? What do you guys think?

[Despondent]

Moved; fits here better than ROTS forum.

[Revan-47]

ugh, their needs to be a mandatory list to newbies of topics already covered.

[whogivsahoot]

ugh, their needs to be a mandatory list to newbies of topics already covered.

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Sorry, but I am new to this site. Just curious to see if others liked my idea.

[Dorothy]

Don't worry about Revan, he gets a little fussy sometimes. I think it is quite good. What are your plans for Episode III?

[Revan-47]

nah dont take it personally, there are just a lot of topics redone over and over again. you cant help it.

[Jaded Wolf]

I dunno. I like to see where Anakin came from. Also, I think a companion to Obi-Wan such as Qui-Gon was good. I just like the Liam Neeson character. The Clone Wars should definetely start the prequel, but the clones should definetely play a part in Episode I. Anakin should start shallowing into the darkness in Ep. II, but not fall completely in. That has to be Ep. III so it directly ties into Ep. IV. But hey, everyone is entitled to their beliefs.

[StarWarsIsUs]

This topic has been covered so many times it isn't even hilarious anymore. Check out some of my scripts I wrote... if they are still here.

[darth_newmacer]

I like your ideas, so I will incorporate them into MY OWN views….

Episode I Phantom Menace

The Jedi Knights and the Republic have just entered the clone wars without knowing it. Several senators have been taken hostage and Jedi have been dispersed across the Galaxy to rescue them. Two Jedi Knights, Anakin and Obi Wan are sent to Alderaan to save senator Padme Amidala. They are sent with a fleet of Republic militia officers including Bail Organa. In a huge fight over alderaan, Anakin, Obi Wan, Organa, and several troops manage to get onto Viceroy Gunray’s (without the accent) space station (way smaller than the Death Star-looks like trade federations but it isn’t) The viceroy contacts Darth Tyrannus and Tyrannus tells him that this was all planned and that they need to kill the senator now and the two Jedi. Meanwhile the Republic troops and two jedi blast their way into a main chamber where Bail, Anakin and Obi Wan are able to get into an elevator. Many cool Jedi stunts take place until finally they get the senator and blow up the space station. Gunray retreats from the station with his ship and Obi Wan and Anakin/Bail with the senator get in a escape pod plummeting towards alderaan. They land in the swamps where they find hundreds of droids looking for them. Tyrannus arrives in one of the other separatists space stations and begins the search for the senator. They find the capital city and some ships to escape. They notice the droids have taken over and are making death camps. Anakin and Obi-Wan naïve and foolish free a group of Alderaan militiaman and in the brink of time make it to an available ship where they leave the planet hopefully to go to Courascaunt. On the way out, the separatist blockade blast one of their engines and they must repair. Anakin flies them to his home world tatooine where he has family. Obi Wan stays with the ship and sends Anakin, Pamde(reluctantly) and Bail (to watch over Padme) into Anchorhead. Anakin’s family goes to the city once a year to stock on needed supplies for their homestead. He goes to the place where they usually stay and finds his brother Owen. He discovers his parents are dead and Owen is engaged to Beru. Owen pleads with Anakin to farm with him but Anakin says no, Owen reluctantly helps Anakin with his problem. He heard of this gambling lord called Sebulba. He runs everything and might be able to help him. Meanwhile, Tyrannus finds out that they are on Tatooine and sends several battalions to retrieve his hostage before they can leave. Annakin meets with Sebulba and learns that they is a pod-race on the next day. He bargains with Sebulba that if he wins, Sebulba will get Anakin the supplies he needs, but if he looses then he, and the rest of his crew will become the slaved of Sebulba. Sebulba agrees and sends one of his bounty hunters to show them where the pod is. The pod is in bad shape, but Anakin thinks he can fix it up with the supplies for the pod Sebulba has given him. Sebulba in fact is betting against him. He doesn’t know Anakin is a Jedi Knight. Anakin works on it until night time. While looking at the moons of Tatooine him and Padme talk and kiss (without the bad lines). Padme regrets it but Anakin is happy, all the while Tyrannus’s droids scower Tatooine looking for them. Finally the race comes and Anakin wins (after all that jazz) that is when the droids spot him and report back to Tyrannus. It turns out that Sebulba has lost all his money and won’t give them the parts. Anakin corners Sebulba draws his light saber and kills him. He regrets it and tells Padme and Bail that Sebulba gave him the money. They buy the parts and are off. As they approach the ship with the final cargo (Before this Obi Wan goes into town to help Anakin with the parts. During this he and Owen have a large argument leaving with Owen saying: “Never come back!”) The droids meet up with them and almost kill them. They arrive safe in Courascaunt and learn that in Alderaan hundreds of people have already been murder by the Seperatists. Obi Wan tells the council that it seems several rebel systems seemed to have banned together, that is the only way that invasion of Alderaan could have worked with all the droids. Who is this phantom menace under which these systems have allied? The council wonders while the senate has a heated debate. They vote for all out war on these separatists. Obi Wan and his long time friend Qui Gon (He is on the Jedi Council) talk about the possibility of a sith lord and discuss Anakin’s seeming defiance, Obi Wan notes that Anakin’s interest in Padme could hurt the Jedi while dealing with the Senate. Anakin all the while discusses with Padme the kiss, and meets with his friend Chancellor Palpatine (who in my version is not Darth Sidious. Instead he is a sith disciple whom sidious promised that if he would follow his orders and make sure the republic entered war that he would control the new sith empire. None of this is known by the audience. Note: Tyrannus (Dooku) is Sidious’s one and only apprentice, Palpatine is a disciple.) Palpatine constantly tells Anakin of the dark side and about power. Anakin OBVIOUSLY has a lust for it. The Senate and Jedi council agree to attack the separatist on Alderaan. They go over there and fight. Many Jeid are killed, but only Obi Wan and Qui Gon meet up with Tyrannus. They discover he is a sith and a former Jedi master known as Count Dooku. (Anakin is all the whil breaking into the capital and cornering the Viceroy: He says with a light saber directly over the viceroy’s head “Now, we will discuss a new treaty.”/ Organa is leading a battle with walkers and huge battalions (Gungan battle without the gungans)) All the good guys win (Tyrannus looses his arm and escapes alive) And the wars have begun.

I'm out...

[Otal Nimrodi]

What is this, the fifteenth time this was covered?

[darth_newmacer]

Star Wars Episode 2: The Clone War
Almost three years after my previous installment, this one begins with the search for Darth Tyrannus and his seperatists' hidden bases. Obi Wan joins Anakin on an unkown planet that is immense jungle with a city in the center with a shield generator. The republic is trying to invade the city, but the generator is stopping them.
Obi Wan lands on the planet and Anakin informs him of an acient tunnel the Republic troops have exploited that will lead them underneath the generator to the city. This is all happening in a Republic for established with a turbo laser continually firing at the shield. So they go through the tunnel and find the shield control tower and destroy and tell Commander Bail Organa to send his troops in. The Jedi get into the battle as well and notice a strange warrior. Anakin in a full of anger chases him down, and finds him. Cuts off his arm and begins interrogating him. He says that the republic will fall, that the time is coming when Lord Tyrannus will rule, and he mentions the killing of Padme at which Anakin kills him. He tells Obi Wan he had to, and Obi Wan takes the Mandalorian warrior’s gun. They both go back to Courascaunt and Anakin tells the Jedi Council what the warrior told him. The council examines the gunfrom Obi Wan and Qui Gon points it out as a Mandalorian weapon. They were cloners a while back and were expelled from the Republic. Anakin also mentions Padme’s death, and Yoda suggests that some hatred lies between the Alderaan senator and the separatist attempts to conquer Alderaan. Obi Wan volunteers him and Anakin to guard her and the council agrees. Anakin goes and meets Padme on a Courascaunt street, he also visits Palpatine who tells Anakin about the ability of a sith to bee more powerful using emotions. Qui Gon and Obi Wan talk about the Mandalorian history. Then we switch to Darth Tyrannus (Count Dooku) arriving on a planet being met by his evil disciple known to the audience simply as Maul. Maul and Tyrannus spar, and Tyrannus easily beats him. He informs Maul that his master (Lord Sidious although that is unknown to the audience) has a special task for him. He must kill the Alderaan senator Amidala and bring her head back to him, but that he must wait until the time is right. (When Sidious wants him to*)Back on Courascaunt the Senate is debating, while Padme talks with Anakin about their relationship (*uncheesy) He tells Palpatine that he wishes he were stronger for Padme because he is worried he won’t be able to protect her. Palpatine agrees to teach him an art that is forbidden by the Jedi, called using the dark side to improve power( this involves emotions something highly forbidden.) After the night, it is revealed by a message from Bail Organa that a transmission was intercepted by a Republic ship. It is of Maul communicating with Tyrannus of something top secret going on in a far away Kamino system. Obi Wan volunteers to go and does without the approval of Yoda. Yoda believes it’s a trap, why else or how could such a transmission be intercepted when many other have not? Anakin meanwhile suggests that Padme be put fully under the care of him while Kenobi’s leave. Qui Gon decides to help Skywalker though and Anakin is upset by their seeming mistrust. His attitudes have been changing dramatically ever since learning this new technique of Palpatines. Qui Gon talks with Anakin about his fighting styles and Anakin is obviously upset and confused by this. Obi Wan arrives on the planet Kamino, a densely fog ridden and water like planet. He lands on a small island where he finds a factory like building. Inside are Mandalorian clone machines and Mandalorian clones. Maul meanwhile is instructed by Tyrannus to kill the senator quickly and so Tyrannus instructs Maul to lure young Skywalker to Kamino where Tyrannus can kill him himself. Thus the senator will be left alone. Maul does this (by pretending to want to strike at Pamde’s apartment) and Skywalker falls into the trap after Qui Gon told him not to follow the craft, but Anakin must prove himself. Upon this, Pamde decides to rescue Anakin and Qui Gon and Organa follow her. Obi Wan on Kamino finds out the clones are ready and their first destination is the capital city. He tries to contact the Jedi council but only half a signal comes in. He is captured. Skywalker arrives on Kamino and is beaten by Maul and taken to Tyrannus. Soon after ward (Maul and Anakin have a cool duel just to note*) Padme and Qui Gon arrive and infiltrate the building. They too discover what Obi Wan has. They blast their way into a chamber where Anakin is and save him. Anakin and Padme try not to show affection in front of the Jedi master. Maul soon arrives and Qui Gon tells Bail to go find Obi Wan with Padme. They’ll handle this. They fight and Anakin kills Maul. Qui Gon is upset because Anakin uses anger, Qui Gon also notes in a way that Pamde and Anakin’s relationship could hurt their efforts in peace. Anakin become strangely angry, and Qui Gon recognizes this. He notes that he hangs out with Palpatine and it bothers him for he senses something wrong with Palpatine (he’s already told Anakin this before) Anakin in one fit of anger kills Qui Gon (stabs him in the back) feeling bad, he tells Padme Maul killed him later on after Obi Wan is saved. Tyrannus flees Kamino and watches with his master on another ship, the carnage happening on Courascaunt. (Moments earlier thousands of clone ships have begun destroying the planet) Anakin, Bail, Padme, and Obi Wan (deeply saddened by Qui Gon’s death) return to the besieged planet and fight in an epic battle. Sidious calls off the attack for he has bigger plans for the Republic. They retreat and the republic is forced to create a draft of citizens into the Republic Army (instead of the local Republic militias), and a new Republic storm trooper to ensure safety. Many Jedi were killed, almost three fourths. Since all of (or most of) Courascaunt was destroyed, they now must meet on Dantooine. They burn Qui Gon’s body, and it all ends with the audience seeing hundreds of Republic star cruisers begin to take off to fight the new clone wars.

[theredbaron]

I have my own rewrites of Episodes I and II in my online journal. They should be among my most recent posts, but click back to previous pages to see the rest of them.

http://www.livejourn.../users/red_ajax

[theredbaron]

I have my own rewrites of Episodes I and II in my online journal.  They should be among my most recent posts, but click back to previous pages to see the rest of them.

http://www.livejourn.../users/red_ajax

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http://www.chefelf.c...?showtopic=4327