Rememberer's takes Now showing in the screening room...
#46
Posted 03 May 2005 - 06:08 AM
I have checked it out - in fact I've commented there.
But - back on original topic - new chapter, a character-driven one rather than an event-driven one, of The Clone Wars is up in the screening room now. New one will go up tomorrow or Friday - and another one will go up with a few pics over the weekend.
But - back on original topic - new chapter, a character-driven one rather than an event-driven one, of The Clone Wars is up in the screening room now. New one will go up tomorrow or Friday - and another one will go up with a few pics over the weekend.
#47
Posted 03 May 2005 - 09:50 AM
Hmmm, this is the first time I've stepped into the Star Wars forums in quite awhile. To answer the question posed by Mnesymone, I'm a basher, but I have little interest in fighting the battle, or whatnot.
I quite liked the second chapter. Lots of dialouge, and the characters seem to be developing well.
I quite liked the second chapter. Lots of dialouge, and the characters seem to be developing well.
The Green Knight, SimeSublime the Puffinesque, liker of chips and hunter of gnomes.
JM's official press secretary, scientific advisor, diplomat and apparent antagonist?
JM's official press secretary, scientific advisor, diplomat and apparent antagonist?
#48
Posted 03 May 2005 - 06:20 PM
The second chapter seems even more detailed than the first. Sometimes while reading, I had to stop and think what was going on... nothing wrong with that, as a matter of a fact, I think that you should continue that. I like to stop and think about what I am reading, perhaps even more-so AFTER I'm done reading. The way you make me stop during, is alright, but doesn't have the same effect. You did have some good dialogue in there. I liked it very much.
#49
Posted 03 May 2005 - 09:36 PM
Thank you - thank you very much... new chapter should arrive tonight and if not then two days hence... another one (maybe even two) will make an appearance over the weekend. Just like to reinforce the old bludgeoning insistence of a separate discussion thread (this one) because I don't want to end up with the thing itself being sandwiched between a great deal of commentary.
#52
Posted 07 May 2005 - 07:50 AM
Appearance by Yoda. Did very well. Good job.
#53
Posted 08 May 2005 - 08:12 AM
Mnesymone, this is truly magnificent. I got genuine thrills of excitement from reading your work. No-one has ever done anything for Star Wars that comes even close to this since Timothy Zahn wrote the Thrawn trilogy.
Pay no heed to the criticisms that some of the other users have posted. They know not what they are talking about. This is wonderful.
The magic is back.
Pay no heed to the criticisms that some of the other users have posted. They know not what they are talking about. This is wonderful.
The magic is back.
#54
Posted 08 May 2005 - 11:00 AM
Yes, ignore the critisisms, for they are wrong.
But constructive critisisms should still be taken into account. Just the one. Be careful with empathy/telepathy. If Obi Wan can read minds, we'll fall to the dark side is blocking our view argument again.
But constructive critisisms should still be taken into account. Just the one. Be careful with empathy/telepathy. If Obi Wan can read minds, we'll fall to the dark side is blocking our view argument again.
The Green Knight, SimeSublime the Puffinesque, liker of chips and hunter of gnomes.
JM's official press secretary, scientific advisor, diplomat and apparent antagonist?
JM's official press secretary, scientific advisor, diplomat and apparent antagonist?
#55
Posted 08 May 2005 - 11:05 PM
The empathy/telepathy thing will kick around every now and then, but the whole "dark side clouds all" will be rather differently done - since the Jedi use the Force for "knowledge and defense", the Sith will use it for deception and attack. The Sith will be consummate illusionists and very skilled at hiding their thoughts. Those not trained or not entirely trained in the Force but potentially strong in it will be easily read by others - a la Vader searching for Luke under the throne gantry - this applied to Anakin in the scene here. New chapters may be up tonight, but within a couple of days. Also I'd like to point out that just as constructive critiscisms are welcome, so are contributions to the story, though most of the key scenes I have my plan for.
#57
Posted 09 May 2005 - 10:52 PM
I like the appearance of Yoda. I am excited to see exactly who these other two Jedi are. I have full faith in you that you will make them amazing and believable characters.
#60
Posted 10 May 2005 - 07:06 AM
Symone, no I did not remember that. But when the story is finished I plan to go back and reread it, considering there are probably some important things that left me.