[Just your average movie goer]

And then he can confess it to his girlfriend, who'll kindly forgive him.

[Supes]

Supes, if you're interested, I've just begun another story:

Destiny's Child

Please note that at no point in the story is there any mention whatsoever of Midichlorians.

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Hey Helena! Sorry that I missed this post first time around. I've just read Part One. You are a treasure!

Like LYAMG I'm looking forward to Part 2. Despite your own thoughts on your skill, you really do have a talent in presenting your material with great feeling.

The Skywalker, now that's how to make a link. Pure gold my dear. Absolute pure gold

[Helena]

OK, part 2 of 3 has now been posted. Might take a few hours for it to show up, though.

[Supes]

OK, part 2 of 3 has now been posted. Might take a few hours for it to show up, though.

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Fabulous! I'm looking forward to the final installment. Thanks for continuing with these short stories. In many ways they are one of the few things keeping me passionate about Star Wars. I also like the way your treating the name Skywalker. Not sure how much you have put into it, but I like the idea that Revan does not like the name and as such it's asociation with him becomes lost in history.

On a completely unrelated note, I think you and Movie Goer should drop into the Debate Club. There is a thread there in which Hoffman is trying to establish a new government. I've proposed a triumvirate between Barend, Madam Corvax and myself. We'd love your support as I'm sure you'll agree we have the most reasonable suggestion

This post has been edited by Supes: 28 January 2005 - 06:55 PM

[Just your average movie goer]

That was excellent, Helena. I'm really looking forward to the last installment too.

Just some minor criticisms though - I think it would be better if you didn't mention Exar Kun, because he originated in a stupid Kevin J. Anderson novel (that guy's as big an idiot as Lucas). Also, it'd be better if you called the students apprentices, which is what they were originally called. Padawan is the stupid prequel word. I loathe that word.


However, that aside, this was another very well written piece. You have a very strong command over your style. It seems very natural and it's very easy to read - it flows very well.

Excellent work as always.

[Helena]

That was excellent, Helena.  I'm really looking forward to the last installment too.

Just some minor criticisms though - I think it would be better if you didn't mention Exar Kun, because he originated in a stupid Kevin J. Anderson novel (that guy's as big an idiot as Lucas).  Also, it'd be better if you called the students apprentices, which is what they were originally called.  Padawan is the stupid prequel word.  I loathe that word.
However, that aside, this was another very well written piece.  You have a very strong command over your style.  It seems very natural and it's very easy to read - it flows very well.

Excellent work as always. 

I'm sorry about Exar Kun and the Padawans, but both of these are mentioned in KOTOR - in fact, as you'll see in my next installment, the Exar Kun War is actually fairly important to the plot. So there's not much I can do about it, I'm afraid.

Supes - thanks for the invitation, but I'm staying well out of the Debate Club. Not because I don't like debating, but because I know that if I started debating political issues I'd never stop. Besides, I get enough of that kind of thing at university.

[Just your average movie goer]

I'm sorry about Exar Kun and the Padawans, but both of these are mentioned in KOTOR - in fact, as you'll see in my next installment, the Exar Kun War is actually fairly important to the plot. So there's not much I can do about it, I'm afraid.

Fair enough. It's a pity though that the creaters of KOTOR let these things from inferior novels and movies into their work.

But anyway, don't worry too much about. Like I said, everything else was great.

[Helena]

Fair enough.  It's a pity though that the creaters of KOTOR let these things from inferior novels and movies into their work.

But anyway, don't worry too much about.  Like I said, everything else was great.

Even worse, they include the crap about the Dark Side 'growing stronger' and 'clouding our perceptions'. Luckily it's not a major part of the story, but still... ugh. However, to give them credit, they did at least leave out Midichlorians and prophecies about bringing Balance to the Force.

[Just your average movie goer]

Thank heavens for small mercies.

[Supes]

Thank heavens for small mercies.

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Agreed entirely. It's funny, the first time I read the Anderson novels I really enjoyed them. Probably because I was on a high from the Zahn novels. Second time round though really hit home the ordinary nature of the work.

And Helena, no problem on the turn down ofthe invite, I really do understand where you're coming from. I'm just enjoying trying to establish a triumvirate. I think people are coming around to my way of thinking

[J m HofMarN]

Great work Helena! Your story really has a wonderful flow to it and a style that makes it easy to read. It never seems to jump in tone or change too much, rather it keeps a wonderfully consistent narration throughout all of it that I've read. It never ceases to amaze me that women seem to be able to write men so convincingly as you do. I always feel a bit insecure writing female characters and I'm never quite sure if I get them right. In Glamis it's not much of a problem since the female characters are all just going to be plays on stereotypes but it was very problematic in my vampire novels and literary fiction. How do you manage to do it?

[Helena]

Great work Helena! Your story really has a wonderful flow to it and a style that makes it easy to read. It never seems to jump in tone or change too much, rather it keeps a wonderfully consistent narration throughout all of it that I've read. It never ceases to amaze me that women seem to be able to write men so convincingly as you do. I always feel a bit insecure writing female characters and I'm never quite sure if I get them right. In Glamis it's not much of a problem since the female characters are all just going to be plays on stereotypes but it was very problematic in my vampire novels and literary fiction. How do you manage to do it?

Wow, another reader! I'm glad you like it. As for being able to write men well, I think that women on the whole are just better at empathising than men (I don't mean to be insulting, but there is a lot of evidence that this is the case). Men are better at understanding cars; women are better at understanding people.

However, the best way to improve your writing is to read a lot yourself. If you want to write women better, I suggest you try reading some 'chick lit' (if you feel you can force yourself to do so). In fact, you could start by having a look at some of my other stories: 'A Beautiful Friendship' is written from a woman's point of view, while 'Hiding' switches between a male and female POV.

[Helena]

The third chapter is up at last! But don't think you can escape yet, there's still a short epilogue to come.

[Just your average movie goer]

I'm looking forward to reading it. However, could you post a link for me? When I tried looking before, it only displayed parts one and two.

Anyway, I'll try again soon.

[SimeSublime]

I've been putting off reading these due to time constraints(hell, when I log into the forums, I'm usually here for a few hours), but just got into reading them. Have read "A Losing Battle", and was very impressed. I mean I knew you could do satire, but you serious writing is just as good, if not better. The only possible advice I have is to try your hand at something of your own creation, rather then fanfiction. I'll try to catch up on the other stories in the next few days.