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Posted 24 September 2004 - 11:22 AM

Yes, definatly a metaphore.

Let's see if anybody can pick that very obscure reference.
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Posted 24 September 2004 - 11:48 PM

I just had a new idea. You know how in those Humphrey Bogart or Thin Man detective flicks the woman always comes into the office on a rainy day after the detectives monologue and starts begging him to help her while he self narrates everything? Why don't we do the whole sassy african american angle. Observe

Bruce: It was a rainy day like a thousand others. My rent was due and I hadn't cracked a case in months, then it happened. She walked in the door. Man I'd seen a lot of women but none like her.

Gabrielle: What the hell are you talkin' about I just came to ask you to find my brother!

Bruce: She had legs that could have gone from Genesis to the apocalypse and a knockout-

Gabrielle: Are you going to help me or am I going to have to bitchslap your white ass?

Bruce: She said she'd bitchslap my ass. I felt a flutter at that and thought I might take her up on the offer. But business came first.

Gabrielle: This is the last dayum time I go to the discount detective agency!

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Posted 25 September 2004 - 01:18 AM

I like it, my friend. I like it. cool.gif
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Posted 25 September 2004 - 01:23 AM

Ok, here's the final cast, as usual feel free to interject.

Detective O'Morse--------- Bruce Campbell
Crime boss ---------------- Christopher Walken
Governor Schwarzeneger- Eric Roberts
Omorse' partner----------- Rutger Hauer
Token love interest-------- Gabrielle Union
Crooked Irish cop---------- The guy who played the cop in Gangs of New York

So here's the scenes

1 (set before the films events occur) Bruce Campbell is a cop watchign Schwarzeneger outlaw necrophilia and then walks away, telling his partner that the battle is just begining.

2 credits roll

3 (set in the present) Bruce Campbell is now a private detective and is asked to investigate something by token love interest.

4 Bruce Campbell snoops around crime boss' warehouse and is warned to stop by crooked Irish cop. Next he stops a load of corpses headed for the wearhouse and interrogates the driver who at some point remarks "ever since necrophilia became illegal the crime lord and his friends have been making a killing, even after payoffs!"

5 a flashback of Bruce's partner's death is brought on by what Crooked Irish cop says and Scwarzenegers involvement is subtley hinted at.

6 Bruce tells token love interest that the case looks very complicated and dangerous and she asks him to stop persuing it but he says he can't. They kiss.

7 Bruce digs up some files and discovers that crooked is working with the warehouse's owner and transporting money to an unknown third party (scwarzeneger)

8 Bruce starts for the warehouse but is confronted by crooked. A fight of some sort ensues and crooked is struck down. In his dying words he tries to tell Bruce who killed his partner but just comes out with an "aaagh" Bruce discovers a huge briefcase full of money in Crooked's car and upon picking it up remarks "Wow, someone would have to be pretty strong to lift this thing!" Afterwards he talks tenderly with Token love interest before she gets kidnapped.

9 Bruce busts up the corpse warehouse with some honest cops, saves Token and chases down the crime boss, who is on the phone with someone. After the crime boss drives his car off of some high thing into something solide Bruce picks up the cel phone and sees that the number on it is that of the governors mansion!!!

10 The governor tries to kill Bruce before an award ceremony when Bruce confronts him. They fight and burst onto the platform before the audience. As the battle goes on Schwarzeneger picks up the heavy briefcase full of mob money to try to crush our hero beneath it but Bruce shoots open the lock and the governor's treachery is revealed to the world.

11 Campbell rides off into sunset (not the sun though) after a reporter questions him as to what he'll do next.

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Posted 25 September 2004 - 02:07 AM

Beautiful, mate. But may I suggest one very minor change?

Replace "Wow, someone would have to be pretty strong to lift this thing!"

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"Man, you'd have to be Mr Universe to lift this thing." cool.gif
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Posted 25 September 2004 - 02:42 AM

JYAMG- Great idea. This is the kinda thing we're paying you for. Alright. Now we can start work on the script once my co-producer has his two cents.

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Posted 28 September 2004 - 04:26 AM

Writer- J. M. Hoffman

Producer- Barend

Director- Just Your Average Movie Goer

Best boy grip- Sime Sublime

Personal assistant to Mr. Movie Goer- Civilian Number 2

Starring

Bruce Campbell as Richard Omorse
Christopher Walken as Don Torelli
Eric Roberts as Governor Scwarzeneger
Gabrielle Union as Latisha Hall
Rutger Hauer as The Partner
Special appearance by Tad the Banana
And the guy from Gangs of New York as Crooked Irish Cop (CIC)

Just Your Average Bare Hoffman productions presents:

Dead Girls Don't Do Dishes[SIZE=1]

-Opening scene: The American national anthem plays at a ceremony for GOVERNOR SCHWARZENEGER to comemmorate the outlawing of necrophilia. OMORSE looks on dejectedly and is joined by CIC-

Omorse: Does he really think this law can be enforced? This only opens the way for gangsters to take over!

CIC: It dosn't matter if a law can be enforced or not m'boy, it's whether it's profitable.

Omorse: Damn but you are a crooked Irishman.

CIC: Aye, m'father was a crooked Irish cop and his father before him. In fact one of my ancestors was the first to betray the English at the battle of Bannockburn but he went back to them when he found that William Wallace didn't pay worth shite.

Omorse: I never watched Braveheart. I saw the Patriot and figured it was the same thing, they're both just movies about Mel Gibson's seething hatred for Englishmen.

CIC: That they are lad.

Omorse: So you really expect these laws to be enforced?

CIC: O'course I do. In this great land anyone without the money to avoid it has to follow the law then. That's what makes this country great.

Omorse: -Sighs and looks on as a shower of balloons fall from the top of the building and begins to walk away, turning down his hat as he does and gathering his coat about him. His long trenchcoat sweeps across the camera, blacking out the screen as the opening theme is sung with lots of naked women silhouetted and hopping about and some men with gun silhouettes running around-

Corpse Omorse, You can't kill him cuz he's Corpse Omorse. If ever you do wrong, remember the words of this song, justice will come before long, he'll kick you in your dong, cuz he's corpse omorse, corpse omorse, he always gets the chicks, necrophilia makes him sick, a fight with him shouldnt be picked, he'll kick you in the dick, cuz! he's! corpse! o! mooooooooooooorse! -bang-

-Scene 2: OMORSE sits at his desk talking to himself-

Omorse: I remember it like it was yesterday. It was a rainy night and I hadn't cracked a case in months. My landlady, if you can call a woman with a moustache a land lady, was going to be there soon to ask for the rent that I owed her for my appartment which, by virtue of a neon red magnifying glass, was advertised as the office of a detective agency. Office, heh, I didn't even have anything but a phone and a filing cabinet full of placemats from diners I liked. There was the Rainbow Diner on first, Denny's, Checkers, Where the hell was I going with this? Anyhow that's when she walked into my life. Of all the appartments with all the moustachioed landladies filled with all the diner placemats in the world she walked into mine.

Latisha: What the haaael you talkin bout? I just need someone to help me find one of my babies daddies. He's behind on his child support.

Omorse: She had legs that could stretch from genesis to revelations and then some. Just one look at her and I knew she was gunna...

Latisha: -cutting him off- Gunna slap yo white ass if you don't start talkin sense!

Omorse: She said she'd slap my white ass. I was thinking of taking her up on it. I was also glad my lower quarters were hidden behind my desk cuz I had one hell of a...

Latisha: Bitch why you trippin! -Slaps him aside his head- Dayum this is the last time I get one of them discount dick agencies.

Omorse: Sorry, I slipped into self narration for a moment there. Alright, what can you tell me about your husband?

Latisha: Oh he aint my husband. He's one of them Wayans boys I slept with.

Omorse: Great, then I'll just talk to every member of the Wayans family I can find.

Latisha: I tried but that'd take forever there's gotta be least a hundred of em.

Omorse: Do you know where this guy might be?

Latisha: He ran off with some fool named Torelli to get into the corpse smugglin business.

Omorse: Torelli...

Latisha: You know him?

Omorse: She asked if I knew him. Oh man did I ever know him. It was a year ago to the day and I was with my partner. We were hunting down a dangerous gangster when he went on ahead...

Latisha: -Tosses a picture of Loc Dog from Don't Be A Menace to South Central While Drinkin Your Juice In the Hood- Man shut the haaael up and find me my dayum meal ticket.

Omorse: Oh yeah, that. Don't worry you poor helpless woman, I'll find your father/brother/business acquaintance and by the time I'm done we'll be passionately in love.

Latisha: Yeah yeah, I'll sleep wit you if you find him.

Omorse: I could tell she was all class with a heaping helping of looks on the side. And she sounded pretty desperate. Man, I'd love to be the guy lucky enough to have a lady like her chasing me. I decided to get on it right away. First stop was Torelli's wearhouse.

-Scene 3 opens in a seedy warehouse area with OMORSE sneaking around.-

Omorse: It might have been this very warehouse where my partner was shot. I couldn't really remember. After you narrate your every move for so long you get your stories mixed up after a while. Like the time my uncle tried to kill a gopher on his farm. Man that thing was mean as hell. He couldn't take it down with gasoline or by shooting into the hole so eventually he hired me. I did some work checking with the local authorities and some sleuthing around the hole and I told him that the culprit was in fact a gopher. I never got a beating like I did that day before or since.

CIC: -Sneaks up and taps Omorse with his nightstick- Well that's all fine and good then lad but this is private property.

Omorse: I'm here working on a case, this woman's friend -shows him the picture- is missing and she thinks he was employed by Torelli.

CIC: Aye he drives trucks for Torelli but you'd best leave off of him, you know what happened last time you went against the mafia. -his voice echos as a flashback ensues-

Los Angeles of one year ago. THE PARTNER is chasing down a mysterious criminal and a cry is heard. OMORSE arrives on the scene to find his partners neck broken-

Omorse: MY GOD! HE WAS TWENTY SECONDS AWAY FROM RETIREMENT! NOOOO! MEDIC! MEDIC! WHY GOD WHY!? -the scene fades out-

CIC: Get out of here lad, before they catch you. If you really want to find him he's smuggling from Mexico now, he'll be driving an unmarked trailor on the freeway.

Omorse: Thanks, but why are you telling me this?

CIC: -Holds out his hand expectantly-

Omorse: Oh yeah -hands him some money and runs off-

(thats all I got so far, more soon. Next is the high speed chase!)

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Posted 28 September 2004 - 04:46 AM

Wow, credited, with...something.
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Posted 28 September 2004 - 04:48 AM

I like it so far, my favourite bit being the part about the gopher. I guess least favourite is the womans speech, but I've always hated that sterotype.

And Just Your Average Bare Hoffman productions was great.
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Posted 28 September 2004 - 05:30 AM

That was a highly entertaining read, J M. Love the parody of all the stereotypes you are doing as well.... "HE WAS ONLY TWENTY SECONDS FROM RETIREMENT!"

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Posted 28 September 2004 - 06:22 PM

wasn't Brendan Gleeson the cop from Gangs of New York ?



(although this pic is from Cold Mountain)

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Posted 28 September 2004 - 08:48 PM

Not that cop silly, the crooked one. Gleeson played a non-crooked irish cop. There'll be more to come later. With the token love interest character I was trying to mimic the part of Daishiki in Don't be a menace if you've seen that.

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Posted 28 September 2004 - 10:35 PM

-OMORSE has a dramatic high speed chase with the truck driver, ending in running him off the road and approaching the vehicle.-

Omorse: Get out of the truck and put your hands on your head

Driver: I don't want any trouble man I'm getting out -He exits iwth hands on his head-

Omorse: What's in the truck?

Driver: Ummm toys?

Omorse: You mean dead bodies?

Driver: No way I don't do that kind of stuff!

Omorse: -Opens the door- Then why are there so many corpses back here?

Driver: Umm damn you caught me see they're mexican immigrants I was hauling. They must have died on the way.

Omorse: Than why are some of them black and white and asian?

Driver: I'm an equal opportunity smuggler.

Omorse: If you were smuggling immigrants why is it below freezing in here?

Driver: That's how they like it. They're mexican eskimoes.

Omorse: Shut up. You're going to jail for a very, very long time.

Driver: Hey come on we can work something out here. You know this business makes a ton of money even after we pay off the powers that be.

Omorse: No dice kid I don't need your money.

Driver: But in your opening dialogue you said you were behind on your rent...

Omorse: He pointed out a problem with my self narration. I was really confused. Nobody likes plot holes, especially not me. I didn't know what to do. I felt like a horse faced with two equally delicious bales of hay and not knowing which one to eat. Finally I threatened to report him to the LAPD for driving while black and he shut up.

-Newspapers begin to spin like they always do in gangster movies. The headlines read:-

"Corpse Omorse busts corpse smuggler!"

"Torelli vows revenge against private detective!"

"Corpse Omorse promises to bring down Torelli crime family!"

"Newspaper headlines used for plot exhibition!"

"Writers are not very innovative!"

-The scene cuts to the police captain's office. OMORSE enters-

Omorse: Hello captain, good to see you again.

Captain: -Spills his donuts and coffee- OMOOOORSE! You had no authorization to take down that smuggler!!!

Omorse: So?

Captain: -Begins to pick up his desk, getting out new coffee and donuts- So you do it again and you're off the force.

Omorse: I quit almost a year ago.

Captain: Keep talking like that Omorse and I'll have your badge and gun and I mean it!

Omorse: You already have them!

Captain: -Spilling his coffee and donuts in fury- THATS IT SMART ASS! BADGE AND GUN NOW!

Omorse: But...

Captain: BADGE AND GUN!

Omorse: Alright you crazy fuck. -Digs around in his pocket and hands the captain a spork and the photo of the driver-

Captain: That's more like it. Now get out of here you make me sick. -Begins laying out another meal of donuts and coffee despite the growing pile of coffee soaked donuts in his lap-

Omorse: Good, I have to bust up Torelli's wearhouse anyhow.

Captain: You do that Omorse and not only will I take you off the case but I'll have your badge and gun!

Omorse: Fuck you.

Captain: -Spilling coffee and donuts yet again- WHAT THE HELL DID YOU JUST SAY! BADGE AND GUN OMORSE GIVE IT TO ME DAMN IT!

Omorse: -Walks away, closing the door as the captain screams-

-Omorse goes back to his office only to find LATISHA is waiting for him-

Latisha: I couldn't stop thinking about you Omorse...

Omorse: Is it because you find yourselve attracted to my mystique and my deep loner image?

Latisha: No. It's mostly cuz I want my money.

Omorse: Well the guy you sent me to arrest is behind bars now and the cops confiscated all of his money. I'm sure they'll give it to you if you let them keep some of it.

Latisha: You did good, cracker.

Omorse: I'm not finished yet.

Latisha: Well I aint payin you anymore.

Omorse: Look honeylips I know what you want and I can't do it. I love you we both know that but I can't give up this case. No, don't ask me to stop. I could never just forget about it.

Latisha: Ummm

Omorse: No my darling, don't speak. It would be too painful to hear you beg me to stop. I know we could run off to tahiti or walla walla or maybe branson misourri but could I live with myself if I turned down this opportunity? Could either of us live with ourselves? Sure having you in the sack every night would make me feel better but, damn it, some times a man just has to do what a man has to do. Don't cry, no don't shed a tear. I'll come back for you I promise. Once this crazy city is a little quieter we can settle down and maybe have a little kid and we can call him Corpsisha.

Latisha: Whatever. Well like I said we may as well get bizay since you did do your job and all. I guess it won't be that bad if you just pull that ridiculous hat over your face.

Omorse: I could tell she was incredibly attracted to me by the sound of her voice. That night was incredible. We tried out a new position we heard about in Cosmo magazine. The straps that held me to the overhead fan made my skin feel weird but it was indeed hot fantastic sex.

Latisha: Dayum you even talk to yourelf during sex? Shut the hell up and hump me already!

Omorse: I was only too happy to oblige. By the time I fell unconsious from the hanging upside down so long we had made love at least ten times. It was incredible. I hope I didn't get any stains on my trench coat though.

Latisha: I told yo crack ass to take it off.

Omorse: Not a chance baby a real detective always wears his trench coat.

-The next scene opens with Omorse digging through his files to try to find out how Torelli operated for so long.-

Omorse: Damn it. None of these place mats contain any clues at all. I'll have to get into the police records.

-Omorse gets into his car and a high speed chase ensues. The cars go over a huge hill and get airborne. When they land their shocks and suspensions are completely ruined and Omorse and the bad guys continue the chase by pushing their cars to a garage to have them worked on. After a restless night in the garage their cars are repaired and they tear off once again. The bad guys car crashes into a child's lemonade stand, jacknifes and blows up with at least three explosions. Omorse gets to the police office-

Captain: OMORSE! IN MY OFFICE NOW!!!

Omorse: ah nto again -walks into captain's office-

Captain: I know you've been causing a lot of trouble so I'm assigning you a partner.

Omorse: But...

Captain: His name is Tad. He's a bit on the ripe side and he retires in about ten seconds.

Omorse: Sir, that's a banana.

Tad: ...

Captain: Any more of that from you officer Tad and I'll have your badge and gun!

Omorse: -sets the bananna outside and closes the door- Wait out here kid.

CIC: Oh a banana aye it's just right too. -He eats it-

Omorse: -Looks outside- DEAR GOD WHY! HE WAS FIVE SECONDS TO RETIREMENT! OH THE BANANITY!!!

Captain: SWEET MERCIFUL MAGILICUTTY OMORSE! You lost your partner in just five seconds! DAMN IT! -He has a buffet on his desk made up of various coffees and donuts and a cappucino machine and he tilts his desk towards him, spilling it all over himself-

Omorse: I'll avenge you Tad... -He goes out to pick through the files, discovering CIC's personell file and seeing that it has a record of huge transfers of money to him from Torelli.- IT WAS HIM! -He quickly puts the files away and walks out.-

Captain: -Comes in and looks at the files- DAMN IT OMORSE! THESE ARE SUPPOSED TO BE CHRONOLOGICALLY ORGANIZED! NOT ALPHABETICALLY! I'LL HAVE YOUR BADGE AND GUN FOR THIS! RRAAAARGH! -He runs into the next room, a dunkin' donuts and throws himself into the donut display stand and rolls around while pouring a pitcher of coffee over himself-

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Posted 29 September 2004 - 12:01 AM

-Bruce starts for the warehouse but can't find parking. Naturally he parks in a spooky underground parking lot. CIC tries to run him down but Omorse dodges and he crashes and Omorse pulls him out of the car as he bleeds.-

Omorse: Why? Why did you do it? You killed both of my partners and all for what?

CIC: -Coughing and struggling for breath as he bleeds to death- I'm a... a stereotypical Irish cop....

Omorse: And Tad? Why him? What did he EVER do!?

CIC: He was just so delicious....

Omorse: You're a monster, Crooked. And I hope my partners know I avenged their deaths.

CIC: Listen laddie... I... I didn't kill your first generic partner... It was... It .... Aauuuughhhh.... -He dies-

Omorse: Normally I wouldn't mind this.... BUT HE WAS ABOUT TO RETIRE! OH DEAR GOD WHY!

CIC: -getting a second wind- No... No... I don't get my full benefits for another five years because the union gave up the pension plan in exchange for the chief allowing us to take bribe mmmmrrrphhhh

Omorse: -Shoving a sock in his mouth and covering his face- The poor man, so close to retirement...

-Omorse walks away and investigates CIC's car. In it he finds a suitcase packed with money. He tries to lift it but finds it is very heavy.-

Omorse: Man, you'd have to be mister universe to lift this thing!

-He calls up Latisha to tell her what's going on-

Latisha: Hello?

Omorse: Hey, it's me.

Latisha: Who the hell is this?

Omorse: I could tell she'd missed me but I couldn't go to her just yet. There was one last screw left to be turned, one last nail in the coffin. I had to take down Torelli.

Latisha: Oh. It's you. What the hell do you... Hey what are you doing in here! -The sounds of a struggle ensue and it is made clear that Latisha has been kidnapped-

Omorse: LATISHHAAAAAAA! -He runs towards Torelli's wearhouse to save his love, getting out of breath and having to stop for a soda along the way-

Omorse: Damn the parking in this town is really ridiculous!

-Omorse calls up some cop friends and they agree to help him. In the next scene we see Omorse and the cops battling warehouse guards and Omorse fights with Torelli as his love is suspended over a pit-

Omorse: You hung her over a pit of acid! You fiend! -They have a punch out as the cops and gangsters fight-

Torelli: No, actually I didnt have time to fill the pit with anything, you got here pretty quick.

Omorse: Is this a bad time?

Torelli: No no it's fine.

Omorse: Cuz I mean if it is I can go.

Torelli: No I insist it's alright you just caught me unprepared I didn't even have anything to eat made up.

Omorse: -Finally wins the fight- That'll teach you to be a bad host! -The cops win gtheir fight as well and start dumping out barrels of corpses- You're finished Torelli! -Torelli runs off and gets into a car, talking on a cel phone to someone. Omorse chases him off a cliff and the cel phone flies out the window, landing on the road where Omorse' car screeches to a halt. He finds the phone and is stunned at the number on it. It is the governors mansion and suddenly he remembers all the hints:

It dosn't matter if a law can be enforced or not m'boy, it's whether it's profitable.

You know this business makes a ton of money even after we pay off the powers that be.

Man, you'd have to be mister universe to lift this thing!

My partner's neck was snapped... Crooked said he didn't do it and it wasn't Torelli.... SCHWARZENEGER!!! -He cries out in rage as the scene fades back to the newspaper spinnings:

"Omorse busts up Torelli's wearhouse!"

"Torelli presumed dead!"

"Walking pile of coffee soaked donuts demands detective's badge and gun!"

"Omorse vows to make stunning announcement at award ceremony held by governor!"

"Newspaper headlines being used for exhibition getting really old!"

"I mean, really, can't they think of something different? You'd think with a budget like that..."

-The scene opens behind the stage of an awards show. OMORSE sits quietely while nd SCHWARZENEGER approaches-

Governor: Hello there. Planning on revealing any fiendish plots today?

Omorse: Sure am.

Governor: You die now! -They fight and a dialogue goes on during the battle-

Omorse: Did you really think you'd get away with it?

Governor: It was the perfect plan! I outlawed necrophilia so it would become illegal and create a thriving trade in corpse smuggling and I was going to get large sums of money as bribes!

Omorse: I already figured out your plan you don't have to reveal it to me!

Governor: I know it just seems like the right thing to do. -He throws Omorse through a wall onto the stage and is about to crush Omorse with a briefcase of money- Haha die pitiful girly man!

Omorse: Never! -He shoots the lock on the briefcase and the money falls out, the entire audience gasps and then the governor falls off the stage, screaming as he falls ten feet to his death the newspapers spin some more-

"Corrupt Governor dies from fall, Corpse Omorse declared state hero!"

"We love corpse omorse day celebrated in San Francisco."

"Corpse Omorse says that the residents of Castro street may have taken "we love corpse omorse day" a little too far"

"Spinning newspapers finally stop as writers run out of headlines"

-In the end Omorse and Latisha stand infront of a sun set-

Omorse: I'm sorry baby but there's no one woman who could anchor me to a place for long. I have to move on.

Latisha: Whateva

Omorse: I know it'll be hard but you have to persevere for both of us. You understand what I'm saying right?

Latisha: Uh huh, later.

Omorse: -He nods and walks off into the sunset but then turns around, going back to his true love- Sorry, let me snatch these -he takes her sunglasses and puts them on- It's bloody annoying walking into the sun. -He walks off and his themse song rolls with the credits-

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Posted 29 September 2004 - 06:27 AM

LOUD APPLAUSE. That was brilliant, J M. You've done a lot of work on this. I loved the self reflection/first person narration going throughout it.

This -

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Omorse: He pointed out a problem with my self narration. I was really confused. Nobody likes plot holes, especially not me. I didn't know what to do. I felt like a horse faced with two equally delicious bales of hay and not knowing which one to eat. Finally I threatened to report him to the LAPD for driving while black and he shut up.


was brilliant!

And this -

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Latisha: Who the hell is this?

Omorse: I could tell she'd missed me but I couldn't go to her just yet. There was one last screw left to be turned, one last nail in the coffin. I had to take down Torelli.

Latisha: Oh. It's you.


was fantastic. smile.gif

I give it two very enthusiastic thumbs up. Good work, mate.
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