More of my fanfic... Sorry, can't think of a clever title
#17
Posted 23 January 2005 - 05:52 AM
Destiny's Child
Please note that at no point in the story is there any mention whatsoever of Midichlorians.
Hey Helena! Sorry that I missed this post first time around. I've just read Part One. You are a treasure!
Like LYAMG I'm looking forward to Part 2. Despite your own thoughts on your skill, you really do have a talent in presenting your material with great feeling.
The Skywalker, now that's how to make a link. Pure gold my dear. Absolute pure gold
Yoda
#18
Posted 25 January 2005 - 07:52 AM
- J m HofMarN on the Sand People
#19
Posted 28 January 2005 - 06:48 PM
Fabulous! I'm looking forward to the final installment. Thanks for continuing with these short stories. In many ways they are one of the few things keeping me passionate about Star Wars. I also like the way your treating the name Skywalker. Not sure how much you have put into it, but I like the idea that Revan does not like the name and as such it's asociation with him becomes lost in history.
On a completely unrelated note, I think you and Movie Goer should drop into the Debate Club. There is a thread there in which Hoffman is trying to establish a new government. I've proposed a triumvirate between Barend, Madam Corvax and myself. We'd love your support as I'm sure you'll agree we have the most reasonable suggestion
This post has been edited by Supes: 28 January 2005 - 06:55 PM
Yoda
#20
Posted 28 January 2005 - 08:29 PM
Just some minor criticisms though - I think it would be better if you didn't mention Exar Kun, because he originated in a stupid Kevin J. Anderson novel (that guy's as big an idiot as Lucas). Also, it'd be better if you called the students apprentices, which is what they were originally called. Padawan is the stupid prequel word. I loathe that word.
However, that aside, this was another very well written piece. You have a very strong command over your style. It seems very natural and it's very easy to read - it flows very well.
Excellent work as always.
#21
Posted 29 January 2005 - 10:08 AM
Just some minor criticisms though - I think it would be better if you didn't mention Exar Kun, because he originated in a stupid Kevin J. Anderson novel (that guy's as big an idiot as Lucas). Also, it'd be better if you called the students apprentices, which is what they were originally called. Padawan is the stupid prequel word. I loathe that word.
However, that aside, this was another very well written piece. You have a very strong command over your style. It seems very natural and it's very easy to read - it flows very well.
Excellent work as always.
I'm sorry about Exar Kun and the Padawans, but both of these are mentioned in KOTOR - in fact, as you'll see in my next installment, the Exar Kun War is actually fairly important to the plot. So there's not much I can do about it, I'm afraid.
Supes - thanks for the invitation, but I'm staying well out of the Debate Club. Not because I don't like debating, but because I know that if I started debating political issues I'd never stop. Besides, I get enough of that kind of thing at university.
- J m HofMarN on the Sand People
#22
Posted 29 January 2005 - 09:16 PM
Fair enough. It's a pity though that the creaters of KOTOR let these things from inferior novels and movies into their work.
But anyway, don't worry too much about. Like I said, everything else was great.
#23
Posted 30 January 2005 - 12:18 PM
But anyway, don't worry too much about. Like I said, everything else was great.
Even worse, they include the crap about the Dark Side 'growing stronger' and 'clouding our perceptions'. Luckily it's not a major part of the story, but still... ugh. However, to give them credit, they did at least leave out Midichlorians and prophecies about bringing Balance to the Force.
- J m HofMarN on the Sand People
#25
Posted 02 February 2005 - 05:01 AM
Agreed entirely. It's funny, the first time I read the Anderson novels I really enjoyed them. Probably because I was on a high from the Zahn novels. Second time round though really hit home the ordinary nature of the work.
And Helena, no problem on the turn down ofthe invite, I really do understand where you're coming from. I'm just enjoying trying to establish a triumvirate. I think people are coming around to my way of thinking
Yoda
#26
Posted 03 February 2005 - 06:35 PM
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#27
Posted 05 February 2005 - 07:33 AM
Wow, another reader! I'm glad you like it. As for being able to write men well, I think that women on the whole are just better at empathising than men (I don't mean to be insulting, but there is a lot of evidence that this is the case). Men are better at understanding cars; women are better at understanding people.
However, the best way to improve your writing is to read a lot yourself. If you want to write women better, I suggest you try reading some 'chick lit' (if you feel you can force yourself to do so). In fact, you could start by having a look at some of my other stories: 'A Beautiful Friendship' is written from a woman's point of view, while 'Hiding' switches between a male and female POV.
- J m HofMarN on the Sand People
#28
Posted 09 February 2005 - 09:37 AM
- J m HofMarN on the Sand People
#30
Posted 10 February 2005 - 11:03 AM
JM's official press secretary, scientific advisor, diplomat and apparent antagonist?